Happy to help! Big batch comin' in here.
1: "That's passcode" should be "That's the passcode".
2: Kinda minor but I think that should be one line instead of two.
3: "Getting out of hospital" should be "Getting out of the hospital".
4/5: "Gift that will a maiden's heart" should be "Gift that will win a maiden's heart".
6: "Wouldn't care out" should probably be "Wouldn't care about" OR just "Wouldn't care".
8: "If" should be "It".
9: "Such an grand present" should be "Such a grand present".
11: "The odd the way that he does" should be "The odd way that he does".
12: "Ask her about something a gift" should be "Ask her about a gift" OR "Ask her about something".
13: Missing an R in "EnterpRises".
15: "Is this really it means" should be "Is this really what it means".
16: "Case details in second" should be "Case details in a second".
17: "Thanks you" should be "Thank you". It's also debatable whether it should be "On Coulomb" or "In Coulomb".
18: "Is it okay for me to date the leader, right?`" either swap the "Is it" for "It's" or remove the ", right" and put the question mark after leader.
20: "So we can protect you" should be "So that we can protect you".
21: "I will send a formally send a case" should be "I will formally send a case".
22: "He may be a confused" should be "He may be confused".
23: "Announce launch of" should be "Announce the launch of".
24: "Too nice your own good" should be "Too nice for your own good".
25: "It'll never enough be for Nokia" should be "It'll never be enough for Nokia".
26: Another minor one but I think "Just what I expect from you" should be "Just what I'd expect from you"...Either way works I think.
27: "Just an clever" should be "Just a clever".
28: "I heard someone people already made it" should be "I heard some people already made it" OR "I heard someone already made it".
29: Not quite sure what she's trying to say here...
30: "Farther" should be "Further" and also "All i can now do" should be "All i can do now".
31: "It don't matter" should be "It doesn't matter".
32: "So what do we do actually" should be "So what do we actually do".
33: "Letting myself getting swallowed" should be "Letting myself get swallowed".
34: "Would you mind getting out here" should be "Would you mind getting out of here".
35: "Are there are other Royal Knights" should be "Are there other Royal Knights".
36: An extra M in "Emmotinally".
37: "Could be brought carried out at any time" should be "Could be carried out at any time".
38: "It's a name makes you think" should be "It's a name that makes you think".
39: "Maybe slow than that" should be "Maybe slower than that".
40: "Where i could be belong" should be "Where i could belong".
41: Would look better in two lines instead of three.
42: Missing space between "Was" and "Fascinated".
43: "For very long time" should be "For a very long time".
44: When translated from DigiCode to English the first line says "Who are you Who am it Who is Who". Remove the symbol for T in "it" to make it what it should be.
45: "We've haven't heard from you" should be "We haven't heard from you".
46: "About what's going from Kyo" should be "About what's going on from Kyo".
47: "Starting to understand on what's going on" should be "Starting to understand what's going on".
48: Another debatable one but in my opinion "I'm not trying to take a stand and waiting for someone to cover for me" doesn't sound as good as "I'm not trying to take a stand, waiting for someone to cover for me" OR "I'm not trying to take a stand and wait for someone to cover for me". Entirely up to preference.
51: "If you make Lopmon cry, and I'll never forgive you" should be "if you make Lopmon cry, I'll never forgive you" OR "Make Lopmon cry and I'll never forgive you".
52: "Is your friend is lost too?" should be "Is your friend lost too?".
53: "But it's times like this that spirit's more important than ever" should be "But it's in times like these that spirit's more important than ever".
1: "That's passcode" should be "That's the passcode".
2: Kinda minor but I think that should be one line instead of two.
3: "Getting out of hospital" should be "Getting out of the hospital".
4/5: "Gift that will a maiden's heart" should be "Gift that will win a maiden's heart".
6: "Wouldn't care out" should probably be "Wouldn't care about" OR just "Wouldn't care".
8: "If" should be "It".
9: "Such an grand present" should be "Such a grand present".
11: "The odd the way that he does" should be "The odd way that he does".
12: "Ask her about something a gift" should be "Ask her about a gift" OR "Ask her about something".
13: Missing an R in "EnterpRises".
15: "Is this really it means" should be "Is this really what it means".
16: "Case details in second" should be "Case details in a second".
17: "Thanks you" should be "Thank you". It's also debatable whether it should be "On Coulomb" or "In Coulomb".
18: "Is it okay for me to date the leader, right?`" either swap the "Is it" for "It's" or remove the ", right" and put the question mark after leader.
20: "So we can protect you" should be "So that we can protect you".
21: "I will send a formally send a case" should be "I will formally send a case".
22: "He may be a confused" should be "He may be confused".
23: "Announce launch of" should be "Announce the launch of".
24: "Too nice your own good" should be "Too nice for your own good".
25: "It'll never enough be for Nokia" should be "It'll never be enough for Nokia".
26: Another minor one but I think "Just what I expect from you" should be "Just what I'd expect from you"...Either way works I think.
27: "Just an clever" should be "Just a clever".
28: "I heard someone people already made it" should be "I heard some people already made it" OR "I heard someone already made it".
29: Not quite sure what she's trying to say here...
30: "Farther" should be "Further" and also "All i can now do" should be "All i can do now".
31: "It don't matter" should be "It doesn't matter".
32: "So what do we do actually" should be "So what do we actually do".
33: "Letting myself getting swallowed" should be "Letting myself get swallowed".
34: "Would you mind getting out here" should be "Would you mind getting out of here".
35: "Are there are other Royal Knights" should be "Are there other Royal Knights".
36: An extra M in "Emmotinally".
37: "Could be brought carried out at any time" should be "Could be carried out at any time".
38: "It's a name makes you think" should be "It's a name that makes you think".
39: "Maybe slow than that" should be "Maybe slower than that".
40: "Where i could be belong" should be "Where i could belong".
41: Would look better in two lines instead of three.
42: Missing space between "Was" and "Fascinated".
43: "For very long time" should be "For a very long time".
44: When translated from DigiCode to English the first line says "Who are you Who am it Who is Who". Remove the symbol for T in "it" to make it what it should be.
45: "We've haven't heard from you" should be "We haven't heard from you".
46: "About what's going from Kyo" should be "About what's going on from Kyo".
47: "Starting to understand on what's going on" should be "Starting to understand what's going on".
48: Another debatable one but in my opinion "I'm not trying to take a stand and waiting for someone to cover for me" doesn't sound as good as "I'm not trying to take a stand, waiting for someone to cover for me" OR "I'm not trying to take a stand and wait for someone to cover for me". Entirely up to preference.
51: "If you make Lopmon cry, and I'll never forgive you" should be "if you make Lopmon cry, I'll never forgive you" OR "Make Lopmon cry and I'll never forgive you".
52: "Is your friend is lost too?" should be "Is your friend lost too?".
53: "But it's times like this that spirit's more important than ever" should be "But it's in times like these that spirit's more important than ever".
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